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As I looked outside the class room window I saw a big beautiful sky full of wonder. I saw big bright trees swaying with the wind. I saw
small green bushes dancing around and I saw big white fluffy clouds like sheep peering down at me.
I really enjoyed reading this Aiesha. You didn't overwrite by adding too many similes and I agree with Mr Ronalds that the simile you chose was a believable and authentic one. Keep up the great writing!
Well written Aiesha. You have cut the waffle, so your poem flows. Your sheep simile is authentic, and it paints a great word picture.
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed reading this Aiesha. You didn't overwrite by adding too many similes and I agree with Mr Ronalds that the simile you chose was a believable and authentic one.
ReplyDeleteKeep up the great writing!